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Faint Beat by ~Fairy-of-the-Woods:iconFairy-of-the-Woods:

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I open two windows
I open my eyes.
Yes. Now you can feel it.
The cool breeze

It's empty.
What's behind the curtain.
The enchanting curtain we call iris.
All a fake cover

Put your ear on my ear;
hear what I hear.
Noisy, isn't it?
These are my thoughts

You can at last hear them.
Really... Can you? They're so many...
..so many that my head will burst.
Your head's going to burst, too.

Place your hand on my chest.
Do you feel my heart?
©2008-2009 ~Fairy-of-the-Woods
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Submitted: January 14, 2008
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You must be sick of reading things about myself.
You may call me egocentric or sth but the truth is that I want you to know me, and what I think of myself.
I want you to understand me.
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~pontikaki:iconpontikaki: Jan 14, 2008, 7:18:53 AM
*speechless* This is very good. ;)
"Put your ear on my ear;
hear what I hear.
Noisy, isn't it?
These are my thoughts" <--this made me shiver.

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~Fairy-of-the-Woods:iconFairy-of-the-Woods: Jan 14, 2008, 7:23:31 AM
Thank you. I wrote it yesterday in an emoish moment. XD glad you like it though.
Well... I must quit scaring you.

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~pontikaki:iconpontikaki: Jan 14, 2008, 7:27:11 AM
No no...It made me shiver in a good way. XDDD

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~lilytheshadow:iconlilytheshadow: Jan 15, 2008, 6:58:13 PM
I really love the images you protray in this. I also like the part that :iconpontikaki: mentions. I really like the metaphors you use, like the eyes and the window (at least that is what I am assuming you were trying :XD: ). Really nice work! :+fav:

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~Fairy-of-the-Woods:iconFairy-of-the-Woods: Jan 16, 2008, 3:38:01 PM
:hug: Thank you so much, I'm glad that my poems are still liked by some people!

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~lilytheshadow:iconlilytheshadow: Jan 16, 2008, 5:23:14 PM
:hug: Ahh, of course we like your poems and, as always, it is my pleasure.

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